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1Kyuuzous Sword Skills Empty Kyuuzous Sword Skills Wed Apr 27, 2016 1:14 pm

Kyuuzou Maruishi

Kyuuzou Maruishi
Name: Ittoryu Iai: Shishi Sonson [One Sword Style Draw and Resheath Technique: Lion's Song]
Rank: C
Magic Cost: 20/20
Requirements: The Cursed Blade
Class: Offensive
Element: None
Cooldown: 3
Duration: 1 post to charge and lasts 2 posts
Effect: Placing the sheathed sword upright and listening to the "breath" of his opponent, the attacker rapidly unsheathes, attacks, and resheathes their sword. An interesting note is that Kyuuzou does the technique back-handed as opposed to from the waist with a standard grip on the sword. It Causes deeper wounds able to reach the muscle at most. Capable of also causing deep bruises if the spell hits directly and can be used up to 4 times a post for 2 posts. The damage of the slash is halved if used twice per post.

Name: Yakkodori [Disaster Harbor Bird]
Rank: C
Magic Cost: 20
Requirements: The Cursed Blade
Class: Offensive
Element: None
Cooldown: 3
Duration: Instant
Effect: Kyuuzou launches from his sword a crescent moon-like projectile of compressed air to the opponent with great speed going and causing deeper wounds able to reach the muscle at most. Capable of also causing deep bruises if the spell hits directly. It goes about 10m before dying off and has a height of 5m and a width of 2m.

Name: Ryūkansen [Dragon Coiling Flash]
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: The Cursed Blade
Class: Offensive
Element: None
Cooldown: 2
Duration: Instant
Effect: Most often used as a counterattack against a thrust or charge, one sidesteps a forward-moving opponent and moves past them. In doing so, one spins in a full circle, adding momentum and centrifugal force to the strength of the sword swing, which is then aimed at either the opponent's back or the back of the neck. Which causes necks bruises since he keeps his blade in its sheath in most of his fights.

Name: Gofuu Juuu [May Wind, October rain]
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: The Cursed Blade
Class: Defensive
Element: None
Cooldown: 2
Duration: Instant
Effect: By synchronizing his breath with his opponent Kyuuzou stands still waiting for his opponents move as he dodges by clashing his blade with either there weapon or physical spells stopping the attack dead in its place allowing Kyuuzou to counter with another spell or get closer to his opponent.

Name: Shibuki Ame [Splashing Rain]
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: The Cursed Blade
Class: Defensive
Element: None
Cooldown: 2
Duration: Sustain
Effect: Kyuuzou holds his sword while still in the sheath infront of him and begins to spin it creating a wind like shield to block 2 D rank spells. The shield can be destroyed by 1 C rank spell or higher spells and its height and width is about 5 ft and only able to block the front making his back vulnerable to attack



Last edited by Kyuuzou Maruishi on Sat Apr 30, 2016 8:51 am; edited 3 times in total

2Kyuuzous Sword Skills Empty Re: Kyuuzous Sword Skills Thu Apr 28, 2016 6:13 pm

Uriël

Uriël


Hey there! I’m here to give you your pre-review, to get you in preparation for the time a moderator comes here to give you a full approval!

Ittoryu Iai: Shishi Sonson [One Sword Style Draw and Resheath Technique: Lion's Song]

Seems doable. I don’t see any problem with the speed, since it normally doesn’t make all that much difference. As long as, and I assume it is, it's able to be blocked and dodged, it’s fine.

Yakkodori (Disaster Harbor Bird)

Not sure if it’s done on purpose, but C-Rank spells have a cooldown of three posts, not four.

Besides that, C-Rank spells reach a distance of max. ten meters, instead of fifteen. The only way you could add the five meters to your distance is if you add a major drawback after using it.

Ryūkansen (Dragon Coiling Flash)

Like the spell above, you can drop your cooldown by one, considering it’s a D-Rank spell.
Other than that, I don’t see a problem with this one.

Gofuu Juuu (May wind, October rain)

You can just put the duration to ‘Instant’ for this one, as it’s only happening on that moment. Personally, it seems like a normal dodge and attack move to me.

Shibuki Ame (Splashing Rain)

Put ‘Sustain’ as a duration for this one. In addition to that, since the normal cooldown for a D-Rank is 2, you need to add 3 onto that, making it 5.

Also, noticing that you made a couple of errors in your cooldowns or distance reached by spells, you can check out the regulations here:

http://www.natsudragneel.com/t3983-the-magic-regulations

3Kyuuzous Sword Skills Empty Re: Kyuuzous Sword Skills Thu Apr 28, 2016 9:46 pm

Kyuuzou Maruishi

Kyuuzou Maruishi
Edits made as you have requested

4Kyuuzous Sword Skills Empty Re: Kyuuzous Sword Skills Fri Apr 29, 2016 2:52 am

Uriël

Uriël

Alright! I don't see any further problems with it. A moderator will post here shortly to give you the final review.

5Kyuuzous Sword Skills Empty Re: Kyuuzous Sword Skills Sat Apr 30, 2016 8:25 am

Sayuno

Sayuno
Ittoryu Iai: Shishi Sonson

- Spells don't have speed, please remove the numbers "15m/s".
- If the spell can be used 4x in 2 posts, which means 2x in 1 post (?) damage would be halfed. The spell can alltogether only deal 1 C-rank damage, so if you were to hit twice, it would be 2x D-rank damage.
- The sustain cost for offensive spells is the same amount as the casting cost. So the sustain cost here would be 20mp and not 10.

Yakkodori

- Same thing with speed. I'll quote something from the magic regulations for you, so you know for the future:

Magic Regulations wrote:Speed: Speed is generally universal across techniques. At a moderate distance, a spell should take about half a second to reach it's target. This should change depending on both elevation and distance, with downhill spells going faster, uphill going slower. However, this doesn't effect it too much.

Ryūkansen

- You can't enhance your own speed with a spell that is not a buff, so I need you to take out the numbers (both your speed and the spells speed) here again.

Gofuu Juuu

- The cooldown here is, as with any other D-rank spell, 2 posts. ^_^
- Same thing with the speed and the numbers, please take them out.
- Here is another thing: If an opponent fires a D-rank (or higher) spell at you and you use this attack to " clashing his blade with either there weapon or physical spells" the attack is over. You can't use it to attack again because you already used it to encounter one of their spells - I hope that is clear.

Shibuki Ame

- Cooldown can be 2 posts. Other than that, this spell is fine.

Here is a list of the cooldowns per rank for you to remember and look up for future references:

Magic Regulations wrote:Cooldowns: Each spell also has a cooldown to prevent players from spamming their spells. The cooldown posts are only your own posts, not the posts made by the other players in the thread. A 2 post cooldown means that you can use the spell again in your 3rd post. And so on.

D-RANK: 2 Post CD
C-RANK: 3 Post CD
B-RANK: 4 Post CD
A-RANK: 5 Post CD
S-RANK: 6 Post CD
X-RANK: Once per thread
Z-RANK: Once per thread


A note for the cooldowns: The cooldowns start AFTER you finish your spells, which is why Uri choose to give you 5 (2 normal, spell lasts 3 posts), personally I think it's better to keep it at 2. Why? Your spell might get canceled by you or your opponent after 1 or 2 posts instead of 3 after you casted it. Then you'd have to wait 3 or 4 posts - as you can see it's not accurate.

6Kyuuzous Sword Skills Empty Re: Kyuuzous Sword Skills Sat Apr 30, 2016 8:37 am

Kyuuzou Maruishi

Kyuuzou Maruishi
Edits made and some of them changed

7Kyuuzous Sword Skills Empty Re: Kyuuzous Sword Skills Sat Apr 30, 2016 8:54 am

Sayuno

Sayuno
Kyuuzous Sword Skills KiOtOfN
Ryūkansen & Gofuu Juuu chosen as Starters.
Train away.

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[b]Name:[/b] Ittoryu Iai: Shishi Sonson [One Sword Style Draw and Resheath Technique: Lion's Song]
[b]Rank:[/b] C
[b]Magic Cost:[/b] 20/20
[b]Requirements:[/b] The Cursed Blade
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] None
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 3
[b]Duration:[/b] 1 post to charge and lasts 2 posts
[b]Effect:[/b] Placing the sheathed sword upright and listening to the "breath" of his opponent, the attacker rapidly unsheathes, attacks, and resheathes their sword. An interesting note is that Kyuuzou does the technique back-handed as opposed to from the waist with a standard grip on the sword. It Causes deeper wounds able to reach the muscle at most. Capable of also causing deep bruises if the spell hits directly and can be used up to 4 times a post for 2 posts. The damage of the slash is halved if used twice per post.

[b]Name:[/b] Yakkodori [Disaster Harbor Bird]
[b]Rank:[/b] C
[b]Magic Cost:[/b] 20
[b]Requirements:[/b] The Cursed Blade
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] None
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 3
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Effect:[/b] Kyuuzou launches from his sword a crescent moon-like projectile of compressed air to the opponent with great speed going and causing deeper wounds able to reach the muscle at most. Capable of also causing deep bruises if the spell hits directly. It goes about 10m before dying off and has a height of 5m and a width of 2m.

[b]Name:[/b] Ryūkansen [Dragon Coiling Flash]
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Magic Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Requirements:[/b] The Cursed Blade
[b]Class:[/b] Offensive
[b]Element:[/b] None
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 2
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Effect:[/b] Most often used as a counterattack against a thrust or charge, one sidesteps a forward-moving opponent and moves past them. In doing so, one spins in a full circle, adding momentum and centrifugal force to the strength of the sword swing, which is then aimed at either the opponent's back or the back of the neck. Which causes necks bruises since he keeps his blade in its sheath in most of his fights.

[b]Name:[/b] Gofuu Juuu [May Wind, October rain]
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Magic Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Requirements:[/b] The Cursed Blade
[b]Class:[/b] Defensive
[b]Element:[/b] None
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 2
[b]Duration:[/b] Instant
[b]Effect:[/b] By synchronizing his breath with his opponent Kyuuzou stands still waiting for his opponents move as he dodges by clashing his blade with either there weapon or physical spells stopping the attack dead in its place allowing Kyuuzou to counter with another spell or get closer to his opponent.

[b]Name:[/b] Shibuki Ame [Splashing Rain]
[b]Rank:[/b] D
[b]Magic Cost:[/b] 10
[b]Requirements:[/b] The Cursed Blade
[b]Class:[/b] Defensive
[b]Element:[/b] None
[b]Cooldown:[/b] 2
[b]Duration:[/b] Sustain
[b]Effect:[/b] Kyuuzou holds his sword while still in the sheath infront of him and begins to spin it creating a wind like shield to block 2 D rank spells. The shield can be destroyed by 1 C rank spell or higher spells and its height and width is about 5 ft and only able to block the front making his back vulnerable to attack

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