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1Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Fri May 30, 2014 7:09 pm

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
Name: Lightning
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Lightning Magic
Class: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 2 Post
Effect: Zenbolt unleashes a lightning from his hand and hits the opponent and it cost a little damage-The size of Lightning Boltz is 24 inches long and Range of the lightning is 5 meters long

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Name: Lightning Punch
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Lightning Magic
Class: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 2 post
Effect: Zenbolt envelops his hand in a lightning and punches his target and a light bruises upon impact.

Spell Picture:

Name: Thunder Storm
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Lightning Magic
Class: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 2 post
Effect: A 1 normal storm cloud is created by Zenbolt's powers. Using these storm cloud, Zenbolt can rain 1 lightning down on the land below him. The cloud can be made no further than 5 meters away from Zenbolt. And it causes light bruises upon impact -The cloud is 1 meter long and disappear after 1 Post and the size of lightning boltz is 3 meter long

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Name: Electric Light
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Lightning Magic
Class: Supplementary
Element: Lightning
Duration: Instant
Cooldown: 3 post
Effect: The power of lightning will just coming out from his hand and 25% making him stronger.

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Name: Heavy thunder
Rank: C
Magic Cost: 20
Requirements: Lightning Magic
Class: Offensive
Element: Lightning
Duration: Instant 
Cooldown: 3 post
Effect: The Storm cloud created by Thunderstorm can rain down 1 lightning but the lightning from the Storm cloud are much larger and more powerful than normal lightnings.The cloud can be made no further than 10 meters away from Zenbolt. And it cause deep bruises upon impact -This cloud is 5 meters long and disappeared after 1Post and sized of lightning boltz is 5 meters long

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Last edited by Zenbolt Gustatic on Wed Jun 18, 2014 5:32 am; edited 10 times in total

2Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Fri May 30, 2014 9:52 pm

Warren Dent

Warren Dent
You can't have a B-rank starter, only 1 C-rank and 4 D-rank starter spells.

3Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Sat May 31, 2014 4:02 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
Bump

4Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Wed Jun 11, 2014 3:42 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
bump

5Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Thu Jun 12, 2014 1:07 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
bump pls

6Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Thu Jun 12, 2014 8:51 pm

Inzei Mishima

Inzei Mishima
Lightning:
- D-Rank spells cost 10MP.
- I'm not really sure what you're trying to say here. You shoot a lightning bolt at your opponent, and the bolt is 2 meters long, right? Clear it up a bit.
- Change the cooldown to 2 posts.
- State that it has a range of five meters.

Thunder Metallurgy:
- I'm going to reject this spell. At D-Rank, you shouldn't be able to melt and then reshape things, nor is it a capability of lightning magic. Change the entire basis of this spell.

Thunder Storm:
- What is the Ark Maxim?

Electric Light:
- I'll let you increase the duration if you want. A 1 post buff doesn't seem very good.
- Mention the percentages. A D-Rank buff of a non buffing magic will increase a stat by 25% Specify whether it's speed, strength, etc.

Heavy Thunder:
- I'll let you drop the cooldown for this spell. 5 seems a bit extreme for a C-Rank spell.
- A C-Rank spell would cost 20MP, not 15MP.
- Once you explain your previous spell, Thunderstorm better, I'll ask you to edit this spell a little bit more.

Bump when edited.

7Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Fri Jun 13, 2014 7:19 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
Bump

Remove the thunder metallurgy and change to Lightning Punch.

8Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Fri Jun 13, 2014 5:55 pm

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
b

9Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Fri Jun 13, 2014 8:19 pm

Inzei Mishima

Inzei Mishima
Lightning:
- Phrase this better. I don't know what you're trying to do here. Are you throwing a bolt of thunder at your opponent? If you are, state the size of the bolt.

Lightning Punch:
- State that the spell causes light bruises upon impact.
- You can drop the cooldown to 2 posts.

Thunder Storm:
- At D-Rank, you should only be able to create one cloud, so you get one bolt. State the size of the bolt, and that the bolt will cause light bruises upon impact.
- State the size of the cloud and how far it can travel before disappearing.

Electric Light:
- Approved.

Heavy Thunder:
- So, basically, this is an improved version of your Thunder Storm spell? In this case, state that the lightning will deal deep bruises upon impact.
- Mention the size of the cloud.
- Mention how far your cloud can travel before disappearing.

Bump when edited.

10Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Fri Jun 13, 2014 8:56 pm

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
Bump


  • State done.



  • Mention done.



  • Lightning:
    i was trying to say here is he can shot a thunder to the enemy.

11Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Sat Jun 14, 2014 8:13 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
Bumpiness

12Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Sat Jun 14, 2014 8:32 am

Inzei Mishima

Inzei Mishima
Lightning:
- I know what you mean. State how large the thunder bolt is.

Lightning Punch:
- Approved.

Thunder Storm:
- You still need to state how far your cloud can travel before disappearing.
- You get one bolt of lightning.

Electric Light:
- Sustain rate of 5MP.

Heavy Thunder:
- State that this spell would be able to deal deep bruises rather than just light bruises.

13Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Sat Jun 14, 2014 8:54 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
Bumpiness

14Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Sat Jun 14, 2014 6:59 pm

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
bumpiiebuumpz

15Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Sat Jun 14, 2014 10:43 pm

Inzei Mishima

Inzei Mishima
Lightning:
- Approved.

Lightning Punch:
- Approved.

Thunder Storm:
- 1km is 1000 meters. D-Rank spell should have a range of only 5 meters at max.

Electric Light:
- Approved.

Heavy Thunder:
- C-Rank spells have a range of 10 meters.
- One cloud = one lightning bolt.
- Get rid of the 50% stronger part.
- Drop the cooldown to 3.

16Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Sat Jun 14, 2014 10:47 pm

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
BUMPIEBUMP

17Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Mon Jun 16, 2014 2:56 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
Bumpiebump pls

18Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Tue Jun 17, 2014 3:21 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
bumpie plss

19Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Tue Jun 17, 2014 7:40 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
BUMP PLSS

20Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Wed Jun 18, 2014 1:45 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
bump

21Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Wed Jun 18, 2014 3:57 am

Jabo Devine

Jabo Devine
Lightning:

How much damage does the lightning do?

Thunder Storm:

State that the cloud can't be created further than five meters away from you. How big is the lightning bolt? State that the lightning bolt can't travel further than five meters.

Electric Light:

Take the sustain cost out.

Change the duration to instant.

or

Extend the duration and give it an amount of posts it can be sustained that surpasses one.

Heavy Thunder:

How big is the lightning bolt? State that the bolt can't travel further than 10 meters. State that the cloud can't be created further than 10 meters away from Zenbolt.

22Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Wed Jun 18, 2014 4:13 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
bump

23Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Wed Jun 18, 2014 4:23 am

Jabo Devine

Jabo Devine
Lightning:

Take out the 5% chance to paralyze the opponent. The proper damage for a D-Rank spell would be, "D-Rank damage." If you wanted to use this as a debuff then you'd state that it debuffs speed by 5%. If you are making this a debuff you'd also need to change the Class to Supplementary.

Heavy Thunder:

State that the cloud cannot be created further than 10 meters awat from Zenbolt.

24Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Wed Jun 18, 2014 4:53 am

Zenbolt Gustatic

Zenbolt Gustatic
fixed

25Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Empty Re: Starter Spell's Lightning Magic Wed Jun 18, 2014 5:09 am

Jabo Devine

Jabo Devine

Thunder Storm:
"The cloud can be made no further than 5 meters away from Zenbolt." <--- Add that in the description. State how big the cloud is.

Heavy Thunder:

"The cloud can be made no further than 10 meters away from Zenbolt." <--- Add that in the description. State how big the cloud is.

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